Colleen grows, in all directions, all for want of me. Incomplete story I wrote a little while ago. I can never finish them though.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.40
- BE: 2.30
- Characters: 2.30
- Technical: 2.20
debtobey
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
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nobody
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
This is a good premise, but really that's all that is. We don't know or care about the characters - the makeout scene is really hot, and the promise of more is great, but it doesn't deliver.
IceOwl
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The characters have no definition at all, the grammar is terrible, and it all winds up in a situation that leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Overall, rather poorly written. If you're going to write a story, try putting some effort into it.
andrat2000
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
OMG why can't I choose 0 in the rating? Some stories should really stay unfinished. By the way I've already deleted it from my harddisk.
Yosemite Joe
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Not a bad little piece. Could use a little more of a description of how the growth was implemented. Keep writing!
abefan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I totally disagree with other posts! The descriptive writing is fantastic. I give all fives in defiance of them.
Yes, the story is short and incomplete. I also prefer on-stage growth. Regardless, the descriptions are good and more story would solve any problems.
bfan
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
No way that I finish reading this story. Sorry, abefan and yosemite joe if you want to be nice to the author please put a comment to the story, but don't rate like this. A rating of 4 or 5 for this adjoin sequenz of words is not fair to nearly all other authors that have published here in the past.
anybody
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I can only agree to andrat2000 and bfan
wOw
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
What a wast of diskspace and time.
ys
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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