Second story in the series. More breasts gettin huge, but how? Read and find out.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.20
- BE: 2.60
- Characters: 2.80
- Technical: 2.60
DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Not a bad story and a decent follow up to the first, some of your grammar and spelling was off though. My main peeve was that the main char kept calling her breasts "fun bags", that's a comment females don't say about their breasts. Could have also worked some more on the description of the BE while it happened instead of just the end result.
LordAeron
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Seemed rushed, I liked the first one, albeit an abrupt ending. This one was jumbled, jumped from one part to a next, just seemed like it was done in a night, maybe a rewrite would fix it up. /shrug
Breasts
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Keep up the good work.
I can't wait for the sequel.
I hope all the girls will get even bustier!
Super Gish
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I thought it was really ridiculous that the one girl's name was Jane Mammory. Nobody has that last name! Otherwise, not bad. Good for a short sequel. Hope to see more, but take your time. Your grammar and spelling is sometimes off.
Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Grammar needs a little work but overall this isn't a bad story but like someone else said it finishes a bit abruptly. I'd recomend a re-write.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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