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A young girls journey of self discovery, as lusts after an older boy. Wait, no. Replace "self discovery" with "massive breast growth". There you go. Written in one very long night. Part Two to follow in the next couple of days.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.43
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.21
- Technical: 4.36
Thomas More
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story with enjoyable characters and dialogue. The descriptions of the BE scenes were totaly erotic, if a bit too fast, as others have pointed out. The story was standard, but cleverly written. Good smut!
Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A great story, nice work. Well written characters but like the others have said, lacking in BE discription. This has made into my "My stories" folder, which is no small feet, well done.
Now give us the second part!
coppert
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
ThatOtherGuy
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
More and better BE detail, other wise quite about average.
MrHHH
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow! This is the best story I've read in a long time! I can see the massive BE coming up, but I don't quite get how the girl is going to explain this to people.
I can hardly wait for the next installment. Also, I didn't give you all 5s just because I really liked the story, you were excellent in each category.
basil_jelly
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The same old formula, but very well done, and I still like it a bunch (maybe that should be an armfull)
neveryoumind
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The growth scenes were too fast. Lets pace our selves a little. It isn't fun to go from nothing to a D and then an HH in no time flat. How about a little more detail on the growth itself?
Horseradish
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Extremely well written. Some of the characters were a little old hat, but otherwise interesting. I really liked her reaching her sexuality through her adventures.
DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Well written, but couldn't really get into the story since it seemed overly cliched.
intangir
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Could use a little more description of the expansion, but I like the characters and love the way Suzie "wins over" Ronnie. :)
yournickname
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I wholeheartedly disagree with any mediocre reviews. The only think lacking was some of the description during the BE scenes, but the description of the character's feelings really helped make up for it. I eagerly await another installment!
bateman
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Quality. A good pace and decent technical content. Character development shows more thought than some other pieces. Please continue.
EFuDD
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Keep it up - I can't wait for part 2!!!
Mopey
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
While there never can be enough good BE description in *any* story, this one has enough novelty, character development, and actual hinting at a plot that I eagerly await the next installment. Please keep writing!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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