The Overflowing Bra

Well... all I can say is "ditto Lefty"; She/He/It hit all the same points I would've made.  I feel your pain as far as the grammar goes (I'm an engineer ;) )

Great story, but could have used a spell checker.

I couldn't read past the first 3 pages due to the number of grammatical and spelling errors. If you want to indicate a plural you do NOT use an apostrophe s. Your point of view and syntex are very much off. My suggestion is to take a creative writing course at some point to help improve your writing. While you have an interesting premise, that's all you have is a premise, not a story, you need to work on your technical qualities to get a readable story. And keep track of which characters you're writing about, you kept getting Keeto and Sachie confused.

An intesting set up wasted by poor attention to the writing. 
Please review the use of the words "seduce" and "sinister" you seem to have a strange ideas about how they are used.

Everybody's talking about the grammar troubles this story has... but let's pause for a moment to talk about some of the good things.  I enjoyed your previous two installments of the series, and this behemoth of a conclusion was a welcomed shock.  I thought that the characters, while not all extremely developed, we're all likable and still thought out more than the usual be story.  The plot was very well done as well, although you seemed a bit rush at the end (granted you had already gone 130-some pages, so I feel like I'm nitpicking, considering it's free).  I wanted an epilogue at the end of the story, so I did find myself enthralled.  And the BE, while seemingly few and far between, was well written.  As for the grammar, well, please use a spell checker, and perhaps let someone else online do a bit of editing for you.  Otherwise, I've enjoyed this trilogy a lot, and I thank you for all of your efforts in writing these pieces.  Good job :)