A girl gets her hands on an old red magical cloak. See what happens when her sister gets half of it.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.86
- BE: 4.14
- Characters: 3.71
- Technical: 4.14
Breasts
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Deja vu?
This is an old story.
Bejabbers
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Definitely seen before; couldn't say who the original author was. Still an interesting story.
Cmdr_Mark
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Read this one some time before, but it looks like it's had several touchups.
Mowerman
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I have posted this story on the Be Archive website before. Thought it would find some new readers here.
DD_Redshoes
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I like it mainly because I do have a deep red dress.
Anyway the characters are OK, just need some more work, perhaps some more rivalry between the two sisters.
The ending, I felt was a bit rushed though and I feel needs a rework.
Yeah I agree with the whole feeling that I have read something like this before, try and stamp your own original ideas and concepts to a story next time.
buddyu
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
It needed flushed out a little more.
Stretch
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Nicely cleaned up from the previous version. An enjoyable read!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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