James finds a box of gum that has a milky consequence
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.86
- BE: 2.29
- Characters: 2.57
- Technical: 2.14
EiC
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
liked it I want a full rewrite by Monday
TitTat
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
joeyjoejr.
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
My big problem is that you switch between third person ("He did this, he did that") and first person ("I did this, I did that"), sometimes in the same sentence. But it's a nice story, and I'd like to read more!
Starr
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The tense changes were bad, and it seemed like you had a story at the beginning, but then it went horribly wrong.
blog
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
Good idea, but needs editing really badly, as it's poorly written
liger
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
way too short, just as it started it was over
Farscaper
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Too quick. You started it then it just ended. Plus, they make grammer checks now that should help with all the tense changes.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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