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Coming come, Amy finds her boyfriend in the arms of another woman. Amy makes it clear who's in charge.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.75
bear chives
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
ended just when it was getting good. very disappointing.
Blake Isaac Gordon
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Really liked the story. The dialogue was top notch. The lab scene where she switched the vials pretty cool as well (I work in a lab and seeing her change the numbers like that made me chuckle.)
Got a little bored with the standard fruit and sporting good descriptions, but that was my only real beef with the story.
Work on getting past, “She was an A cup…� “Her tits were the size of Pumpkins on Steroids…� Wait I liked that phrase ;)
Blake
benji dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
A good story but I think you took too long in getting to the BE and what happened next?
rtpoe
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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