Ben, a college student, receives an electric shock and a copy of a mysterious program one afternoon. An old love is rekindled and new relationships are formed. This is the diary of those events and more.
(Contains one half rape scene)
word document and TXT file included in zip use which ever format you prefer.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 3.33
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 2.67
X-Greg
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Just finished it and it was a great moment !!! I like the female muscle growth part very much. I would have make Rachel addicted with muscle (on herself)
gmancer
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The dialogue is very terse and the characters very flat and unreal. & should never be used to replace and.
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Quite a good story all-round.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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