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The Overflowing Bra

DD-Red Shoes
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The Halloween Wish
Getting drunk at a halloween party can have surprising consequences if you wish for something.
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link2hyrule
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 1

Good story, except one mistake, which if it had no bearing on the story would not have been such a big deal, but since it was integral to what was happening it warrants attention. In the story you say Halloween happened on Friday the 13th, but since Halloween is on a fixed day of the month (October 31) that is not possible. It can come on a Friday, sure, but Friday the 31st, not a Friday of any other day of the month.

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