Caroline trys self improvement through second hand magic on a indescript college campus
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.43
- BE: 2.71
- Characters: 3.29
- Technical: 3.14
KeithCC
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wonderful little story. Not a BE story, but an excellent story!
If they don't love it here, there are several amateur writing and DA websites that would love for you to post a copy there.
Good writers should be encouraged to keep writing you should keep writing.
Leviathan
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
How can I say this... The story kinda sucked. I wasn't sure what I expected, but it was just all so unrealistic and there was no real plot twists or anything. It was just a small transformation, and the girl didn't get what she wanted and she didn't even make a new friend really. Who is Betty? You spent all that time in the beginning telling who Caroline is, then Betty gets TFed, but we don't know anything about her. Meanwhile, Caroline gets the shaft and she's the one with the tragic story. What's the meaning of the story or is there one?
MrHHH
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
More of an Amazon Growth story. eh.
Prophet Tenebrae
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
A nice little scene, the bit at the end made it all worthwhile although there was certainly more than enough in there to make this a full story. Perhaps more description of the actual BE would have been nice but the characters came together pretty well given the length of the story.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I'm too lazy to leave any feedback. The most valuable thing a reader can give an author.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I'm too lazy to leave any feedback. The most valuable thing a reader can give an author.
Grayface
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Well I liked it. it made me horny! but I would like to see carolin get TF'ed in the end.
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