The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

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It All Began With a Card
A girl gets a birthday card which tells her she'll get everything she desires on her birthday. Imagine her surprise when she finds it's literally true!
Average Scores:

BB47
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good!
fakejay
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great stuff. Different.

LostInCleavage
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

If a girlfriend who knew and was fine with her boyfriend's penchant for "Milk and Multiples" actually existed, the world would be a bettre place. Good job.

Benji Dude
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

That's a story! Great from start to finish, the characters werea little shallow but it's forgivable, as are the grammar mistakes. Keep up the good work and give us part 2!

bones
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

good job

Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

A fairly good story with great attention to detail, though a little shallow character-wise.

R
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Great! I want to see a sequal!

Rick
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

I want to see a sequal of this! You have a great story telling ability!

DarkHeart
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Very well written story that showed alot of creativity, though I have to agree the characters were a bit shallow.

anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I like odd transformations like that. the pace was good. Not too swift or too drawn out. I don't know if a sequel would be as good, but I'd be willing to try it :)

being you
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

one of the best stories i've read, love the origionality of the way in which the story flowed and would luv to c a sequal or another story with ur unique touch, keep it up

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