The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Madam Materia
Picture Perfect
Welcome to Madam Materia's Magical Menagerie. For your enjoyment today the tale of a photographer, envious of her models and seeking some change in her life. Though what she's truly after may not be as hard to achieve as she once thought.
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Dbeela
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Skip the grading, I am thankful that you write in a mode that is not so depreciating as many other writers. The good end is appreciated and very welcome.
Nobdy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This story was a wonderful read, and has even surpassed the first one. 
The characters felt more fleshed out than the average fetish story, and I found myself glad that Trisha was given an ending where she could find a little confidence in her old self as well as the new. I think that the writer also captured a bit of the toxicity inherent in being an erotic internet celebrity. Well, well done. I can't even remember the last time I've read a story like this.
As for a few points of improvement, I think that Trisha's dismissal of her old life as a cam whore is a bit reductive at the end, and there could be room to present the lifestyle in a more sympathetic light while also criticizing the toxicity of internetsex service culture. Furthermore, the side characters could use a little more fleshing out. I sensed a bit of chemistry between Trisha and Gina, perhaps? I liked the boss' role as a minor antagonist, and felt that he was a good representation of male chauvinismgaze, but he could also potentially have been used in more situations. For example, I found myself wondering what he may have been texting her back. Was he trying to wear down her confidence? Perhaps acting like a spoiled child would to a rejection? Or did her quitting genuinely shake him, and compel him to check himself? You could go a lot of ways with that.
Overall good story! Looking forward to whatever you have in store!
DB20
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Looking forward to more from you. These last 2 stories have been great!
cwm
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great!
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