The onset of puberty brings fast changes to an 18 year old girl and soon she finds out that she likes it not a bit. A nightmare starts for her, which gets worse and worse the bigger her breasts get.
She learns firsthand what it feels like to get breasts that get bigger and bigger: From no breasts, to small breasts, to big breasts, to huge breasts, to breasts that are that huge that she becomes immobile.
I copied a discontinued classic from 1999, rewrote it, turned the perception of the central character from positive to negative, continued it and finished it.
This is the 3rd revision. Removed some more typos. Added some more details. I didn't want to wait till Easter, so I'm uploading it now.
(Forecast: My next upload will be another story some months or years later in which I'll try out an idea that I've hardly ever read in other BE stories of this type before, something with unexpected body swap via transmigration between male and female. Nobody writes anything like that, so I have to get to work on my own.)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.60
- BE: 3.80
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.60
Hungryhobo
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
I hadn't read much of the original before but I could immediately tell where you picked up the story because of the complete tonal shift. Not a big fan when fans try to continue the story and shove their fetishesinterests in the story that ruin the original intent. Everyone became unlikable, the uncle's personality was changed to be an jerk, and then it felt like it was rushed just to get through to the end. I cannot say this is a good story because of how it was ended. sorry.
Eddie
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
It is a very boring story.
TCay
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
This strays far too much from the original, both in style, tone, and my personal enjoyment. The negativity and living hell her 'family' put her through ruins much of the story.
I always wanted a sequel to this story I originally read in my teens, this doesn't feel like one.
Mr C
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I just like nonconsensual stories. And the essence of nc stories according to my opinion is a negative spin. Well, consider it a horror story. This story type enriches the collection of stories that can be found here. And I'm sure there are other people too who like that and are looking for exactly that.
FleshFan
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
It would be interesting to hear, why you put on that negative spin at all. Definitely a change of pace for this side, but it hurt my overall enjoyment of this story. Other than that it was really good. Very few spelling errors, but nothing major. Please continue your writing efforts, maybe with a bit more joy for the characters.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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