The onset of puberty brings fast changes to a young teen.
I copied a discontinued classic from 1999, rewrote it, continued it and finished it.
This is my very first story ever. English is not my first language.
You get a story that starts small and ends big :-)
I hope you like it.
If Mr. B reads this: Thanks for your inspiration!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 3.50
DaDude
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Mixed feelings about this story.
Even though there was plenty of growing taking place, the actual growth itself was a bit lust lacking. Just an increase in cup size and weight as means of a description, only early on there was a bit more description to their size and dimensions.
With Alana disliking the changes of her growth it created some what of a dark mood for me effecting her overal likability and affecting her interaction with others.
Take my feedback with pinch of salt,
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
The 4 is nit picking, I noticed a few typos andor spelling errors in the Mr C part. This is truly a great story and I thank you for continuing Mr B's story. I NEVER read long stories like this but I did for this one because it was so enjoyable. You are to be commended and please continue.
I found it a little odd that Alana never has sex but is continually orgasms and milk. I was also thinking that Uncle farmer wasn't boning someone. Perhaps that is the next story? Please continue writing.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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