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The Overflowing Bra

Hunter S. Creek
What A Difference A Summer Can Make
A short, 2777-word story with inserted morph  about Oliver's friends' reaction to his little sister Janet after she returns from a summer away.
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Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Really wish this was in txt or rtf.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Really nice to read you again. Great style as always. Hope to see a longer story with actual growth sequence.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice work!
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Very nice idea, I also liked the shopped picture. Maybe there's a chance for another one in bikini?
Also I hope, its not the only chapter, you are delivering.

Maybe you overdid it in the beginning with stating again and again, how flat she was and how grown she is now. It was too redundant.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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