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The Overflowing Bra

Anonymous
TheClause2007@yahoo.com
Watermelons
Looking for a way to complete with the big-titted dream girl, another girl finds a Leprechaun and makes a wish.
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Disappointed
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I like the 2 main characters, but what the hell ? There is no BE at all... Maybe i just don't get it (i'm not a native english speaker) but if I do, it ends with just...nothing...
Maybe it was intend to made a funny end, well, if it is the case, it's not fun actually, original but not fun. Anyway, if i was searching fun story i won't go in overflowingbra.com.
No BE description (so i won't hardly give more than 1...), so overall enjoyment is like..null... Characters are fairly good, and the writing quite not bad. Even if you made a newline every sentence (which made an odd look of the .txt file in some editing software)

In my opinion, you spoiled your story by making it stop to quickly, and especially with a "wtf" crappy end.

DarkHeart
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Ha! That was well written with a highly amusing form of revenge.

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