After finding out how Jacob feels about her, Emily's body begins to change, and Jacob can't help but notice that her transformation is matching up to his deepest fantasies.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.95
- BE: 4.90
- Characters: 4.90
- Technical: 4.90
Eddie
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I like big tits and big dicks. The story was great and left me wanting more more more!
Likeitloveitgottahaveit
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of the best I've read on here. Not too long, not too short, nice wrap up at the end... Only thing I was curious of is minor characters other than Hannah and her cadre. What did the other students and people in general think?
Definitely interested in seeing a follow up if you decide to write one.
flies
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A. Totally hot. Jacob's anxieties are a bit heavy handed IMO, but it doesn't take away from the whole effect, which is fucking amazing.
Bb47
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent! I was worried that it would be one of those predictable boring stories where a dude just makes a girl big and, presto! Everything is perfect. Not this one. Good job.
Squigy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Definitely first rate like MK said it collects so many shared fetishes. What happens to the love birds as they go on?
SoylentOrange
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Too many spelling and grammar errors for me to give more than a 3 on technical, but it was a wonderful story, one of the top examples of the Oblivious succubus subgenre.
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
wow.I thoroughly enjoyed this.
The Red Pen
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
An extremely hot and sexy read! Great character development, writing, and plot development cconsidering it's a shorter story with plenty of sex scenes. rnMy biggest gripe is that I wish there was better, bigger PE and description, though that's not the focus of this site, so no blame there.rnIf you write a sequel, a preg story would make sense, but I think a prequel, about when her parents met would be real good. Maybe even a story about a different succubi with a different but BE related expansion
Kodos
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Splendid work! I like the setting and the wellwritten characters, and the fact that you don't give the game away until fairly late in the story keeps a certain element of suspense going far longer than many in the genre. Please do write more like this!
no name
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Liked it, but the end was a bit short, I think her training could have been expanded some more
Mweijo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Easily in the top 5 stories I have read on this site. rnOne minor thing, which is a preference, is that the first round of growth is asleep and not experienced. Still, I can't justify less than a 5.rnAnother comment is that the characters are quite blank canvases but that works for the best here very well added backstory about them may slow down the fun.
Apple
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Among the best that's ever been submitted to this site.
Xero
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
If possible, I would like to see a follow up to this.
OM NOM NOM
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Browser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Take a bow, and then stop taking a bow and get back to writing for all of our sakes. Incredible stuff
Kronk15
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent story though a bit of fetish teasing
Giant Fuzzy Pig
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This has everything. BE, mostly realistic descriptions of high school life, good characters, magic, and a bunch of really hot sex scenes. I saw a grammatical error pretty late, 'You're job is to' when it should've been 'Your job is to'. This is a minor thing. Keep writing, if you can produce more things like this, everyone will love it.
Firefox
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well written and interesting twist. I hope you write more with the same setting.
Mk
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It was amazing. You collect all my fetishes. Write more.
Fahzbehn
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This piece is going into my permanent collection. It's well written. The characters are enjoyable. The twist caught me. I enjoyed every minute of it. If this is typical of your writing, I most sincerely hope to read more soon as this will go down in the annals of some of the best BE smut ever written.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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