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The Overflowing Bra

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Scene: Being Nice Can Pay Off
Helping an old lady, a boy gets a magic swimsuit as a reward.
Average Scores:
 Andjela
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 1, Technical= 3 
It's much easier to unstndeard when you put it that way!
 DarkHeart
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1 
Not only write longer stories, but don't use runon sentences.
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