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The Overflowing Bra

Captain Neil & Helia Melonowski
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Magic Bust, The
A magic-user casts a spell on a woman in a hotel lobby.
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Huwawa
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Overall a great story. Just the right length. I do really like the dialogue method of telling the story.

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