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Bree's new college ID card comes with a devilish twist that changes her into whatever people say about her. Part 1 of many. Spiritual successor to The ID Card, and re-uploaded in a better file format.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 3.80
- Characters: 4.30
- Technical: 4.50
tusdine
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Glad you're still writing!
LK
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really love the reality altering stories and this is one of the best. You're doing a great job!
Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Fan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The id card stories you write are amazing, I hope you finish this one and find time to keep writing others and exploring changes
wuffy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'm really enjoying this story. Looking forward to her becoming quite the pass-around-girl with all sorts of kinky changes and sexual escapades. Hopefully one of the guys is into slutty tattooed, pierced chicks.
Catfish
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
My main criticism is that early in the chapter, we're told that the instructions for the card say "This ID card shall change BREE BAKER to fit whatever description of her is made while in direct proximity of the card." But near the end of the chapter, Bree is changed using "I wish you were..." and "I like a girl who..." Those don't really seem to count as a "description of her" in the way that (for example) "yeah, you've always had that hair and those lips" does.
It's also an interesting choice to have the instructions in there in the first place -- I think the few other "ID card" stories I've read (including the manga that I think was the original inspiration) don't have the "rules" spelled out like that.
But overall, I'm impressed, and since I do like good reality-alteration content, I'm definitely looking forward to more.
Vez'Roth
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This was an excellent story, and excellently written. Everything going on in the story really hearkens back to the inspirational story in just the best possible way. I loved the minimalist nature of the BE, and the over-all body modification was right up my alley.
Personally, I would love to to see The ID Card become a Thing, like Master PC and other authors pick it up and run with it in the same way that people picked up Master PC.
To the author: If you ever write more, continue going just like you have! Your technical writing is fantastic, and you have the power to describe more without losing the heat. I hope in your next story you're able to explore more of that descriptive heat.
itsasecret
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Really liked the making a wish-type transformation in the story and can't wait until the next chapter.
OdysseusII
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Quite liked this. Would have liked more BE, but this is the first thing I've been interested in on here in weeks, and I wasn't disappointed.
ktc1221
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Can't wait for more! Once we got to some changes it really fired up.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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