The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

ZS
Seeder
My first real foray into writing, I would really appreciate any feedback! I tried to check it for obvious errors. 

Be forewarned, in these first few pages there is not a whole lot of BE, and the focus is on a Futa character. More straightup BE will be coming! 

Average Scores:

KeithCC
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This review applies to all 4 past of the story combined.

The writing was high quality.  Not much BE to describe, but the growth and cum descriptions were really really good.

Characters were relatable.

Only thing I didn't like, and it is a matter of personal taste, is the typical American BBW flabby hugeness.  I see this so much in fiction from the USA.  Are you guys starving so badly there that being fat is something elusive exotic and rare?

I prefer my futas reasonably athletic and able to handle their enormous dicks and sexual appetites.

But anyways, I gave the story a 4 for overall enjoyment.  
Tailsko
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

A great start, but needs much more! Please continue on with this.

anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Decent. Ended before it really got going, though.

technocarwash
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Would love to read more.

Nope
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Good stuff!

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BE Description (Detail, quantity, quality)
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Characters (Descriptions, likeability)
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