The Overflowing Bra

This is way too long winded for what it contains.   It clocks in at just under 20,000 words (43 pages in word) and doesn't really have any clear focus. You'd probably enjoy this if drawn out high school drama is your thing.
Characters -- Despite being written in close first person, there's no consistency in the main character's attitude.  Even the first few paragraphs are all over the place in their priorities.   You'd think with this being half the size of a novel there'd be some real character growth.  (ha ha)
BE Description -- Verbose, but often in bad ways.  Filled with some 'great' lines like "They quickly grew to the comical size of the largest girls in school, like beach balls being filled with air."  The 'action is frequently uninspiring and listy. (Very weird when you consider most of it is first person -- lots of missed opportunities to get some feedback from the MC on the boob growth)  This could easily be higher if the author didn't forget to keep it close to the POV character.
Technical Writing -- While not bad in terms of grammar, the sentences often don't agree with themselves.   More often than not, halfway through the sentences the author forgets the important details of the action and throws in random details.  Also some generally clunky sentences like  "At it's full size, her breasts were now as tall as she'd be if she had no legs." -- what great imagery!  
Overall, the pace didn't do anything for me -- Like this forgets it's a BE story for 65% of it.    

Enjoyed immensely. Intrigue of central mystery is genuinely engaging without detracting from erotic elements at all. Miss Lany continues to impress. Quite vanilla compared to her previous work, which is a check mark in my book but might be an x in yours.

Definitly very readable, nice plot, good characters, good skills in writing. But what I missed in this was a good portion of ass expansion, but that's only my opinion. After all I see much potential for a sequel. Maybe I get my wish fulfilled then? 
Keep on the good work. Nicely done ;)

I loved this story. This is almost to good to be smut. The characters were engaging, the expansion was descriptive, and the mystery of it all was just brilliant. I also liked how realistic the characters felt. You my friend are an A+ writer.

Great story in its own right. I would have read it anyway.  The only thing I had trouble with was that any girl as perceptive and funny as this girl would never have gone unnoticed in my high school.  
The BE just kind of happened, with more emphasis on solving the mystery.