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The Overflowing Bra

Coffee Pilot
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Fantastic Desire ch3
Kay finds herself being changed more and more everyday as the Ring of Desire slowly makes her over into the perfect nymph companion for her satyr boyfriend Derrick. Her boobs are growing, she keeps losing weight, and while she's nearly 30 she could now pass for a college student! She tries to make the most of it, continuing to go to work like a normal person, hoping if she can just make it till Saturday they'll be able to set things right back at the Renaissance Faire. But what happens when her behavior starts to change as much as her body? When the simple wearing of clothing becomes an oppressive chore and her customers take an increasing interest in her expanding assets and ever enhanced and more youthful beauty? Will she be able to resist the urge to give in to her growing nymph nature?

Part 3 of 4. Comment if you enjoy, comment to critique. Also you can find me on DeviantArt. Enjoy!
Average Scores:

Xtra123
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Truly a great read. Would like some additional description of what all the changing, shrinking, and expanding eventually leads to, but still an excellent narrative.

blackmyzery
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really enjoying this series, keep it up please!!!

deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Good work. There were a few technical issues related to incorrect words. I also would have liked to see description of the sex in the shop, which is just glossed over. Still, I enjoyed reading it and really look forward to the next part. Thanks for writing!

Ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Lovin, can't wait for the next one

Grass
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing!
I love the shrinking an expansion simultaniously.
Thank you for your work

reader
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Great, I enjoy your style and would not change enough to matter, good grammar, spelling, story development. Since I mentally desire to change a few picky details I give the `technical' a 4, but many stories do not even get above 2. (There is nothing to excess in the twilight zone of the story. I like and enjoy it.)

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