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The Overflowing Bra

Zymurgy
Anomaly Pt.5
The reality changing program is back in the hands of its rightful owner, and Jake has been punished for his impudence. But Catherine's program develops an unexpected 'glitch' as a result of the previous mayhem, causing widespread transformations and an unexpected emergent property. 
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Browser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
So I finally figured out that Zymurgy was an alias of another author on MCstories... I wonder if this was their pseudonym for some of the weirder stuff that they didn't feel like releasing under the main one.

Really hope ya come back, this is probably my favorite series out there. Fantastic writing.
thisone
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Thats really good! When do you post the next part ?

xyz
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great story

Sam
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent.

2Dex
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Wow. Heh, when I sent you that email with suggestions after the last chapter, I had no idea you'd take one of my random ideas and make it the central tenant of the next one. Nice to know I could contribute to your fantastic story in some small way. Looking forward to seeing if any of my other ideas will make it in to future installments.

Godwin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I never knew the desire to have prehensile extendable vaginae until I read this. Thank you, Zymurgy. This will be part of my list of ever growing fantasies, which may make me disappointed to find such women in reality.

There wasn't much emphasis in character description, but due to the ever changing nature of the story, that can be overlooked.

ac
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

This series has come a LONG way from the initial "boy with magic tech turns a bunch of women into his playthings". Well done!

Lemon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I really enjoyed the deviant oddity here as well. Some of your previous Anomaly pieces have felt a bit plot heavy in parts and I feel like this one you're finally hitting the perfect swing back and forth between plot and smut. The inclusion of these weird transformations and non traditional B.E really brings a great take to the master-pc style story you've got going on. Going forward, I hope you focus a bit more on corruption- humans can be some really twisted creatures with unlimited power, and as the tablet becomes self-aware maybe it needs to explore that a bit, to play with the characters and find out how far is really too far. Good luck, and keep writing! This stuff is great.

Bahamad
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

I thought this story was wonderfully deviant from a normal "tech god making things sexy" story. The characters struggled, the changes weren't "big tits, maybe some comeuppance at the end". Most notably was the (very much taken for granted by me as now routine) heat produced and how changes which initially seemed to be introduced as an exploratory/shock value mechanic become interesting and also a keystone of the story.

My biggest complaint is how tricky it was to try fit into a position to feel or understand the main character. The actual reasoning demonstrated by the character to initiate some of the changes were laid out, but the actual execution of the writing for the character's personality never really felt like it congealed. What I mean is from the very start the character seemed unformed; sure, she's got some sex on the brain, likes to play around with the tablet and get freaky, but as far as an actual personality she seemed much more like a nebulous avatar rather than a person. The way the story plays out makes sense to an extent, but if that was the intent of the writing it seems like there could have been some additional demonstration of puppetry rather than a portrayal of the changes affecting her to make the ending feel more solid.

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