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The Overflowing Bra

Shadow3259
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Jordan's Workout Ch.1
Join Jordan in her struggles through everyday life. Sometimes when your built like this girl, regular activities become a workout.
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Aitchbee
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

Interesting idea, deliberate pace, but way too many spelling & grammar errors which kept me from getting into the story. I suggest you find a good editor.

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