The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

TrebleClef
TrebleCleffy@gmail.com
A Burden On Your Chest
Layla, a waitress, has infuriated an ill-tempered old woman. Now, every tip she gets seems to make her bra tighter and tighter... As always, feedback and constructive criticism are greatly appreciated.
Average Scores:

MysteryGuy9215
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of the best BE stories I have read in a long time. Great characters, perfect descriptions, and a fun expansion method to boot. Plenty of panic and such an incredible ending. Cannot wait to read more from you!

Surf
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

What a great story! The storyline was clever, the way the growth was described was certainly a turn on and the length was just perfect. Bravo!

Murgen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It's entertaining and funny and not too long, pretty much perfect.

Name
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I really liked this story. Might have been nice for the boss to find out about the curse and generously pay a bonus for the night's work, but the story's great as it is!

muh
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

pls more!! :)

The Light Fantastic
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fantastic story! Succinct, snappy, great descriptions and the characterisation was exactly as deep as it needed to be,

Nonard
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fantastic! Well articulated, nice pacing, vivid descriptions... just a great effort all the way around. I'm also partial to the subject not entirely wanting the growth, so this pretty much checked every box for me :) Well done!

Recluse
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I like how the growth took place over the entire story, and it's a great length, too. This is definitely another favorite for me.

Dvosh
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Wow this was hot...and well written too! Too bad the BE and AG weren't centered on a single character...I like the whole package you see...

Keep writing!

ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A real gem this time. I liked everything about it. It has just enough plot to set the stage and the descriptions are plentiful but not excessive. The characters are believeable and don't feel too generic despite its shortness. A great example of a light story about what everybody comes here to read.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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