Your room mate Shilpa has received a shipment of tea from her Aunt, but when she tries the tea it has strange and delightful effects on her. Each tea causes a distinct change, and it isn't long before the cumulative effects turn Shilpa in to a living fantasy.
This was originally a Choose-Your-Own adventure story posted to Deviant Art, so it is written in second person with illustrations. The epilogue has yet to be written, and OFB readers can leave feedback in the "Rate Me" section on what they'd like included in the Epilogue.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.35
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.15
todd
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
well written. it could use a bit more description of the changes. i think a combo of option 2 and 3. an obedient slave cow. you could just make her pregnant later anyway.
Zaloog81
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The King
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
androne16
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I suggest proposing to Shilpa naturally and/or suggest her animal rights and increase her and/or others milk production for commercial supply. there should be some belly BE again after that 5 out of 5 for BE. lastly sending the adapted tea back to the Aunty for a taste of her own medicine.(not BE)
HasLostControlOfHisLife
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
They should both take option #3. It's a crying shame that he's having trouble keeping up with such a wonderful lady, and it's hardly fair that she should have to put up with a disability without being compensated for it. So she can have her milky apocalypse, just like she wanted, and maybe a little animalistic vigour will help him finally match her downstairs. They belong to each other, so why not cattle? And if the tea is a little too strong, at least they're in a nice field.
cc
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
stargod13
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Um i could go for a simple Option 1, nothing more just want the pregnancy thrown in.
Eh
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I'd like to see endings for cattle and chattle...but chattle/being happy is safe. I think I'd like to see cattle more.
seconding the request to somehow make her pre-natal permanently...
thefwank
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Is there any way to "cut" the tea? Maybe ask, since she knows her aunt's teas and such, if there's a way to get the good parts out of #3 (Which is my vote) without suffering the ill effects. I mean, I love, love, *love* cowgirls, but I don't want to ruin Shilpa's personality- or her progress.
Barkis
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
koolaide-kill-you
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I vote for a combination of Options 2 and 3. Have her fulfill her fantasy of becoming your human slave cow wife. That would be great.
rex
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Option 3, also maybe they find some way to make her pre natal permenantly.
thatguy
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
i would choose option 1 or 3 it was nice having images
159qto
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
i would really like to see a scenario where she drinks both the chattel AND the cattle tea during sex and we get to see a whole new level of growth quite substantially larger than any previously in the story and really elaborate further how she is a government experiment who will produce an ever increasing amount of milk and offspring. AND INCLUDE MORE PICTURES!
Ano
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I vote for 2-3 with impregnation
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
"Well, darling, you're already 95% of the way there. Let's just put this spell to rest and have you drink the cattle tea."
Cue still-larger breasts and hips, big, floppy years, and two adorable little horns poking out of her hair.
Difpin
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I liked the story concept overall thou like others have said more elaboration in the dialog and transformation would have been good. I also liked the main character’s consideration of the moral ramifications of what he was doing which seems to be ignored in a lot of stories.
I vote for option #3
Xanadu
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Interesting idea.
Option #4 is my preferred option... with the catch that all the magic released goes right into her breasts. (That seems like the sort of thing her aunt would do.)
PeterBE
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This was a fun read with a nice approach to the reason for the changes and the BE. No doubt it's too short and terse, everything needs more. It would be great if there were more detail to the dialogue and the changes, esp. the BE.
I vote for option #2, but it would be great to find a way to go through several of them, which should not be hard since you've got your magic get out of deus ex machina card already baked in.
Daichi Lu Azure
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
The story itself seemed rushed, while the BE was POOF rather than given detail as the main character was transformed
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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