The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Kotep
wobbuvahi@gmail.com
A Bit Like Revenge
An ex-girlfriend, a guy who feels jilted, and a magic device to make her his permanent little sexpot. Maybe. Or not. Or sometimes, if you can't beat 'em, why not join 'em? Other than losing your intelligence and having your personality irreparably altered.
Average Scores:

TomCat
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Excellent quality. a bit low on detail, but it makes for an easy read. Great plot and action as well.

IshAsh
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

More, please!

jd
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

nice!
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

PLEASE write more. Excellent story. If anything I'd say focus more on the transformations, and write longer stories.

IshAsh
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very well written short story. I'd love to see you write more.

deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

I agree with the other comments. A nice short story, but we want more! :)

Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

A well written if breif first story. Lots of good transformation content but more detail and characterisation would be appreciated, more chances to see the characters interacting with their new lives might be fun too. Please keep writing!

Figment
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It was a nice, cute, and entertaining Short Story. The only real problem was that it was a Short Story. It could be fleshed out abit, but overall it was easy to read and very enjoyable.

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