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The Overflowing Bra

Daniel B.
mdfbianchi@gmail.com
Bra: A Saw Parody (Parts 1-3)
Parts 1 through 3 of my "Bra" short story.

Awaking to find herself trapped in a strange warehouse, Eva is forced to play her captor's game in order to free herself and her friends before they're all remade to his delight.  She has already failed to Save DeDe, but can she still save Carrie-a good girl with a big secret-or Allison, the only person to ever make Eva feel inferior?

Meanwhile, Jenna still hangs by a thread as any failure by Eva ensures certain doom on her part.  Provided in both .doc and .html formats.
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the preve
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I like! I'm not too much a fan of bimboization or shemale but I give this one a pass. A couple of mistakes here and there (minor, very minor grammar issues, no big deal). Very novel take on easily parodied subject. More a 4.5 all around :)

ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Man that was enjoyable to read.

Xenoriddley
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Excellent job! Keep up the good work! Definitaly a good story.

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