pakled05@hotmail.com
Ok, this reads as a comic (was originally for a site that does comics of BE, that shall remain nameless...;) but the '6 months before you see it' kinda takes the fun out of it.
So it's kinda two-dimensional ('ceptin' the BE...;) and the 'politics' aren't meant to be taken seriously. It's all fun, so Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 4.67
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 5.00
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great writing. Great Story (some massive suspension of disbelief required). Needs more physical, down and dirty, titty grabbing, back arching, hair pulling, canoodling.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Pakled you crack me up. Been reading the shorts just so I could tell you how much I love your stories.
Me
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very good! A fun romp, lots of humor, lots of growth. Could have done with a tad more description of the process rather than fade-to-black everywhere, but that's not enough of a fault to mark down a "quickie" story, especially when it meets your usual (impeccable) standards of having:
1) actual plot,
2) actual characters (with protagonists I can cheer for), and
3) actual grammar and spelling to enjoy.
It's always a joy to read your stories, pakled. Looking forward to the rest of your backlog.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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