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The Overflowing Bra

Fantome
fantomeinfernal@yahoo.com
The Serum, part 1
And what if you were able to invent an "immortality" serum?
Average Scores:

anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

hope to see a sequel soon to this fantastic story.

Holland
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Wait, I cnaont fathom it being so straightforward.

Cf
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Gg

Deleter
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Need to delete this one since he reup'd it.

AA
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

it was really good but file was hidden for some reason

Megamelonomaniac
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great story! Download worked OK for me too. Can't wait for the next installment.

PeterBE
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Good fun, a nice start.

The physical changes need far more description.

Suggest you recruit a native English speaker to edit before release.

Looking forward to chapter two!

Archive opens as empty on Windows 7 native zip decoder, but file is present in WinRAR and on Mac OS X. Suggest you re-upload using a different encoder.

dfbfdb
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

download not working

ican
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

can download

Jobber
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Great plot. Really entertaining story. My only nitpick is that your grammar and writing style could use some polishing.

ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Awesome story, download was fine. Just as a note you may want to convert it to a more universal document, pdf or rtf comes to mind, but most people can open .docs so all is well.

Dr_know
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Truly a fantastic tale!
A wonderful job on the attention to detail in this story.
No doubt the sequel to this is going to be a highly anticipated release!
Possibly the best BE Story I have read all year!

-Dr_know

BE Vampirate
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Absolutely excellent!
Your description of the scientific process was perfect.
A great attention to detail without getting buried in it.

Very much looking forward to the next chapter.

painis
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

cant download

Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Its not his fault you can't download it, you stupid twat. Back to the story I enjoyed it

cant download
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

cant download. fix it

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