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What if Laura Lee was your ex-wife? What if you held the The Gem of Possibilities? What if....
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 3.83
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 4.72
OswaldMcDave
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Im more of an Asian lover, so this gets extra points for me.
Bstgate
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
BB
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Did you know that MrGrey is an erotic author on the bimboization scene? He has BE in some of his stories.
Oxriff
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
loved it! the progression as she tried harder and harder to pull him in, the writing, the ending... great work. character-wise, i agree with what flies said (personally, i'd make her crazy, and keep the guy a good guy you want to relate to). the BE description could have been greater and more detailed. but all in all a highly enjoyable read.
IamWhoIam
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
incredibly well written, nice to see an appreciation of science and deep logic on these kind of sites.
anomynous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
R@gnaroCker
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Man, if I had a sex goddess after me, I would've 'quit' alot sooner. Then again..... damn, I would've quit alot sooner. Freakin' good concept for a story.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This would make for a really sexy and scary short film.
Apache
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Ha! I've never had to employ so much logic while reading BE. Well done on that entertaining front, but could have had more detailed BE
flies
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great idea, great execution. Definitely some horror vibes, but that's all to the good, as far as I'm concerned. The only thing I wondered at was why she cared so much about this guy. I think you could have either made her more crazy to start with or made him more of a jerk in breaking up with her.
Nevertheless, I really enjoyed this. The things escalated was fantastic.
Sobtac
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Definitely your best one on here yet, really enjoyed it
af
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Jobber
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Exceptionally well written but very, very creepy. Not my thing at all. Seems more like Halloween horror than erotica.
Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
What if I had decided not to download this story? I would have missed an excellent piece of writing (and you even got "...another think coming" correct!).
Paul
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good story, even if Laura became kind of a bitch at the end. Would like to see an expanded version of the gender-reversed story teased at the end.
a
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Best story. Please write sequel
Xero
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
That story was awesome! There were a few typos in the story , but overall, it reminded me of the movie, "My Super Ex-Girlfriend." Never less, I loved it!
Algorithm
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Fantastic story; loved the concept. Tempted now to answer your challenge!
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