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The Overflowing Bra

The Dark Trianni
The Witch's Pet
A powerful witch uses her prisoner and turns her into a hideous beast for her own sick pleasure. My first attempt at muscle growth, so bear with me here.
Average Scores:

tdean
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

great story. please keep going.

anony123
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

aside from some very minor technical problems an amazingly good story hope you decide to continue

Roid Abuser
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Bit dark, and, well lizards (or whatever, hulking she-male demon things) aren't exactly sexy.

But, if you're into that sort of thing, this is a good story.

Darkheart
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

This was a very enjoyable story and I really hope you continue on with the Witch's plans. My only quibble is that you might want to proofread a bit more, or have someone proofread for you.

Otherwise, keep up the good work.

Dolph the Dolphin
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

finally, at long last, a story worth reading. If this is your first story, then I would very much like to see what you can manage in the future. Than you.

JT
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

It was good

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