The Overflowing Bra

It needed some grammar work, but I found it very short but enjoyable. Perhaps it's cuz I avoid YuGiOh.

Idk much about the subject so I won't criticize it, it's not really my thing; but since your a BE fan and you had the guts to write something, and your new, I figured I'd be honest and say something.
I liked the technical aspect of you describing the growth, it was well done.  Definitely work on some more things for the characters to say though as they transform (although, idk what I would be saying if that really happened, for all we know, thats how anyone would actually respond).  
Again, the story isn't my thing, but I wanted to let you know I enjoyed part of it :)

I won't give this a high rating due to the way it is written. It's not bad for a first story posted on here. You didn't really capture the essence of how Crow acts. I've watched the YuGiOh show a lot in my spare time and have a good sense of how Crow acts. You need a lot less of these drawn out sentences as stated in the other review. I see him as more of a surprised person in a TF scene rather than a "Become suddenly Bimbo" sort of one. If you're going to take a well-known character that isn't a paper-thin personality {Like Ash from Pokemon, TK from Digimon, Shake from Aqua Teen; just to name a few run-of-the-mill paper-thin people); then you need to try and think what the character would honestly say.
It really adds to a story in an immeasurable way (Even a FAP piece), when a character adds properly.
That aside, the overall story itself was weak. It needs polishing in grammar & vocabulary.

Maybe something more descriptive than "OH GOD OH GOD" and "GAHHHH" and "FUCK ME FUCK FUCK FUCK!!!!"