T'was the night before Christmas, and all through the house not a creature was stirring, not even a rhyme. Jack and his wife Jessie are visited by three spirits one Christmas Eve, each one bearing a very special gift. Why? ‘Tis the season, after all. I started this on Christmas Eve, but never got to finish it for posting on the 25th. So... Merry extremely late Christmas!... Enjoy.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.83
- Characters: 2.83
- Technical: 4.33
Fernando
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 1, Technical= 5
Wow I must confess you make some very trhaecnnt points.
Dr Know
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I enjoyed this story, other than the things these fine other folks mentioned, but I too would really enjoy a sequel to this story, or another story that progresses these same attributes into the "wow" size frame.
G-man001
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Nearly perfect except for the inconsistencies pointed out above. A great mix of expansions. Fun sex. Fun times. Keep up your stellar work.
Kodos
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed this story. You did a good job coming up with an interesting premise and exploring it. If there was one thing I'd recommend, it would be spending a bit more detail on the growth scenes. Anyway, keep on writing!
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
A pretty good story. I enjoyed it. There were a few spelling mistakes, and the progression of events wasn't always smooth. For example, I had to go back and re-read the part after the ghost of Christmas present when they go from standing up to lying on the bed. Also, there is a minor consistency issue at the beginning where you claim she has red hair in one paragraph and then call her a blonde in the next paragraph.
blah
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I would deffinitely like to read a sequel, with boobs so big they inhibit her movement and an ass of equal size. Not a big fan of pregmancy though. Also, you should make it longer.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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