The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Compera
TheClause2007@yahoo.com
Cow Girl
Following a cruel practical joke, Cona is unknowingly implanted with cow sperm, and begins to suffer some strange side-effects. Belly expansion, breast expansion, multiple breasts, udder development. All seven chapters included.
Average Scores:

James
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

amazing

JJM
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I have to admit, I wanted to give this story a higher rating overall... I mean, the very thought of multiple breasts and an udder is so damn hot...

But the execution of such a plot was just not done very well here.

First, Cona doesn't realize she's pregnant? With NINE beasts? And each is the size of a 3 month old baby? That's like 100 pounds of baby inside a uterus. I don't want to be all like "that's so unbelievable" when we're talking about other fantastical type of things (such as 4 tits and an udder), but what I find incredulous is that Cona would not understand this whole affair to be about a pregnancy. It's just "fiction breaking", to say the least.

Then there's Cona's attitude. She's just a whiner/complainer. It would have been very nice if she had maybe reveled in the change after a while... Coming to enjoy it, rather than the constant bewilderment and horror and self loathing. At some point, people become resigned to their fate, and begin to look for ways to incorporate the bad things that happen to them in to their normal every-day paradigm. She showed absolutely zero psychological coping skills that one would expect from a typical person. It's like writing a story where someone experiences grief, but is stuck in like, the 3rd stage of grief having never gone through the first two, and never progressing out of the 3rd to finish at "acceptance". We read this, and even if we have no idea about the actual stages of grief, it all just seems "off" to the reader. "This person isn't reacting to this in a way I would expect."

Anyway... Love the concept of a cow/human hybrid... Would have loved to see some sort of revenge or comeuppance on Jenny (was that her name?)... that aspect of the story was just soooo totally forgotten, that it was literally nothing but a contrivance and plot device... (where, once again, we have fiction-breaking lack of response from the main character, where a response would be expected...)

So yeah... hope this helps.

Dexter Sinister
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3

I found this story rather unenjoyable considering how the protagonist does little more than suffer. I felt like I was reading a torture transcript, not an erotic story!

CrashO
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Good, lots of weight, but it seemed like for being impregnated not only was she totally unaware for the entire stretch but more focus was put on the fact that she grew multiple breasts and an udder and begun mooing than the fact that she was knocked up. I kept looking for the preg content but it just kept going without even mentioning that she's pregnant with COWS, and it seems like it was just "Oh her belly moved" which is very far from the truth when you're pregnant with an animal that grows to be twice as big as you are. More emphasis on her weight, her awkwardness, the movement, etc., while keeping the fact that she's in denial that she's pregnant, would be preferred if you do more. And I'd like more. Just...remember how pregnancy works if that's how the plot gets driven.

The Almighty Popo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Very enjoyable.

fox_drifter
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Excellent read! Not an ultra-deep plot, but fun, and one that kept me reading 'til the end, including the epilogue (not something I can say for most stories).
While all the characters had fairly believable dialogue, I did kind of feel like pretty much everyone involved was kind of a jerk, some more than others. That's my only real complaint, though; I almost liked the characters, but never could quite. Great job overall!

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