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The Overflowing Bra

Littelone
2378
This is my first story about BE story so i was interested do it by my self ! it's maybe not the best but it's the first =)
Average Scores:

Above Ground Pools
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Last a few years has been to Ibiza, so met a person there whose style of presentation is very similar to yours. But, unfortunately, that person is too far from the Internet!...

TheNewNo2
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Not going to read a story which is not even two pages long and which is written in bold italics centred, ending with "should I write more".

Mopey
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

This story is a complete waste of time and resources for everyone involved.

Epically bad.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

One can only hope that your next herpes outbreak blinds you, preventing any more of this inane crap.

devdro
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

dear dude who can't write. please stop posting these.

OccasionalReader
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

.wps? Really? A format that NOBODY uses?

Daiyuki
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Apparently the story is even worse now? Reading the comments, I've no idea where these quotes come from, because there's just a retarded "10 steps" thing that has a badly-written line for each step.

cumblasta6990
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

omfg.....i can make a better story in this comment. watch ready. One day i was railing my girlfriend and i couldnt stop cumming and i made her breasts grow. that was more descriptive and better then this dudes "story"

nipplesucker
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Can't open the file where I can read it. Upload it a RTF or TXT file.

a
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I finally downloaded it and got a file that my computer had no idea what to do with. When I finally read it, it was incomprehensible.

Elvis Interuptus
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

A bit early for an April Fool joke but still a good one.

Sir Not Appearing In This Picture
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

MS-Works???????? Please tell me that this is an April Fools prank.

Epic Fail otherwise.

Mr Jeremy
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

for awhile it just sat there in all it's out of reach no download link state, then a download link appeared, and brought up a file that my computer had no idea what to do with. When I did find a way to read it it was incomprehensible. I gave it a three because I enjoyed the chase of trying to find the tale far more than the tale itself. But don't lose hope, perhaps you will develop a deeper understanding of the language and be able to write in it, or perhaps not. Who knows really.

MrHHH
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Good lord. I never thought I'd see the day where I would have to reject a story because it was UNNAMED.

I'll add a name so people have something to click on.

anm
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

How do I download this story?

fwip
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

You can view the story in all its horrific glory by copying the download link for another story and replacing the ID number with 2380.

Favorite quote:
My samples Sonya watched Monica still in the process was all set aside .Monica turned to the side to raise a further ampoule. she touched with her finger the green liquid. "what is this so-slimy disgusting" she weights the fingers on her Pollover and put the others back into the ampoule box.

Stardust
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Suggestion: write in German, have someone edit it, then have someone translate into English. Then someone else edit again.

Megamelonomaniac
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

This is so bad it's good!
I couldn't resist making a few random comments:
"She found a nice little dress for her next dinner"
--is she a giant moth?
"Sonny started to say something but a sound out of the car cut her"
--it must have been a very sharp sound.
"Get out of the Fuck car Swetty"
--and take a shower?
"no without me I go back on may one"
--or perhaps on april thirty?
"one of her short shoulder long hair fall into her face"
--how long was it really?
"the things in there was fallen on the hard rock sand"
--is that like a hard rock band?
"My breasts are growing holy shit"
--she could get busted for that.

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Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

What. The. Fuck.

bigman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

if 62 ppl has downloaded it when i cant find where to download it at

Cycling Dude
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

A promising start, but really needs to work on English language skills.

doggy
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I now the writter of this story hes an XX years old XX from germany whif an good english but not for storys like this XD

Baconman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Two huge suggestions. One, name your submission, I had to do some silly HTML trick to even download the thing. Two, reupload in .rtf or .txt, cause .wps isn't a well-used format around here.

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