Plain Rachel finds a mysterious scroll in an old second hand bookstore and soon discovers that mind really does triumph over matter. Only not her mind!
Amazing 1010. Would love if you extended the final part, how her life is with such a large rack, going to the beach with friends etc.
Why has he stopped writing??????
just amazing i love how you pay attention to more than just the bust.
Great! I cant wait for more!
Stranger! Was that you posting a comment here? I would be so happy to read more of your work!
Agreement with all the other commenters. Fantastic story. A few confusing aspects but those made me feel all the more connected to the confusion and frustration of your of your character. Please write more.
I Love your writing! More stories please!
Absolutely the best I've read. My only disappointment is that you only have one other story out. I would love to see more!
The story arc is excellent, taking her from plain Jane to Fertility Goddess. Her upbeat attitude it especially charming, and I love the characters she interacts with.
I love the supernatural angle, which could be played up more. And the BE could be better (and more descriptions of how our heroine looks now that she's achieved such an hourglass figure, perhaps some accounts of how many more looks she's getting, or manuvering with her new attributes).
And, ideally, to finally get her beau with her to roam those hills and valleys with her...
Please save your stories as ".doc" rather than ".docx"! I have a mac and can't afford the new microsoft word, so these stories don't work on my computer! Thank you!
Excellent story, the best I've read! I agree with the Ann's Worst Nightmare vibe as well. Would love to see more!
LOVED IT! This reminds me a ton of Ann's Worst Nightmare (one of my favorite series on this site) and the constant changes were incredible.
I would have liked more focus on the changes though, like her breasts, their movements, and especially some ass/hip growth in there as well. Can't wait to see more, please let there be a sequel!
Excellent writing and story well built up, the only flaw I would say is the BE/general physical transformation descriptions - describe the process, not just the results.
This was a great story.
MORE! MUST READ MORE!
Great story. I'm curious, does she go home, what happens with her parents, school, the next day? I can see you have an interest in the hair and breasts, but what about other parts of her body? Thanks though. I liked this the most of what I've read in a long time. Cheers.
Brilliant story! I hope to see another chapter with either the same character or even a new one!
I'm excited to see more from you in the future.
OMG!!! So good! I would love to see more stories with this grow shrink steal theme. Please write more!!!!
Fantastic! If you continue, this could be really epic. I see where you left room for many story codes in future chapters. This reminds me of "Ann's Worst Nightmare." Is that you, Stranger?
This chapter spent too much time on her runaway hair for my tastes. I would have rather spent the time reading about a run-in with some boys at the mall.
I didn't like how she snapped at the end. I would have preferred a clever way to get back to normal (with more adventures in upcoming chapters, of course).
In addition to the few minor mechanical mistakes, it could use a quick check for consistency (who thought what, how old did she look, what bra size was she). Another thing might be to make clear what cup-size scale is being used. It became obvious to me that it is C -> D -> DD -> F -> G -> H, but I wasn't sure until over halfway through the story. Some people might think it's D -> DD -> E -> EE -> F -> FF -> G -> GG -> H.
I really enjoyed this story
Legendary story, best in a long time
The age bouncing up and down got a bit confusing, but I did really like the descriptions of the transformations, and the reality-changing aspect of things. Agreed that it could have used one more pass for proofreading, but very enjoyable overall.
Was this really your first story? It was very well done! Please keep writing!
I absolutely loved this story, particularly the hair growth portions. Please continue to write more!
I like the stories where reality is changing around them, and this one was done a little differently than most. Love to see more.
Great story, as others have said there were a few typos, but overall a very good story.
I can only hope that you might continue this at some point.
A few typos here and there, but otherwise great! I hope there's a sequel, and that everyone's "comments" continue to be good and judgmental. ^_^
Pretty good story. I think it was a bit rushed and maybe flesh out some of the experiences and maybe some more control over it and things like that.
I enjoyed it very much, please write more, the topic itself seems pretty good to expand on!
There were some small spelling mistakes, but overall, I loved it. I hope you write another chapter! :)
Great read! Keep writing!