The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Fox
A Moment In Time - Delilah and Erin
A single moment in time, featuring two lesbians who experience an unexplained breast and butt expansion. These are written as a writing exercise and as such are not supposed to have much in the way of plot or character detail. Please rate and critique accordingly.
Average Scores:

francis
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Hard to rate something when the preamble asks you to rate it accordingly... "I didn't put much time into this so rate accordingly." Kind of strange. Anyway, I liked it.

Slack
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very good for what it is.

B.E.N.
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Well written BE scene, could've done with a little more detail.

what
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Not bad!

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