*This is one of about 5 stories I have been working on, so far its the first one done. It is also my first story so It might not be the best.*
Mike finds a costume at SRU that changes his life at a Halloween party. Lots of changes and sex!
Happy Halloween Everyone!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.64
- BE: 4.36
- Characters: 4.45
- Technical: 3.82
WonderLlama2008
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
One of my favorite stories.
Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
This story is a great start, but you might want to work on your grammar and spelling. Keep em coming!
WonderLlama2008
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Awesome Story!
Needs to be separated into paragraphs for readability. The story is excellent enough to deserve the best readability.
TwiTwi
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
The story is not bad.
It describes a nice bundle of pleasureable events that does turn me quite on.
Unfortunately, even as a non-native-English speaker, I noticed a lot of grammatic errors that damped the reading fun.
JJM75
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
A few line breaks between paragraphs would have been great. I found myself constantly losing my place in the wall of text.
Other than that... GREAT story!
Barbie
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Would have love for you to develope the chararter more & as a twist no everything is smooth as your story as much as I love happy ending
Etherealvision
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed it. I hope to see more from you!
voodoo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Fahzbehn
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Word wrap would've been nice. A few small capitalization errors, colons, etc. Spacing between sentences and paragraphing needs work too. That being said, a fun little jaunt with interesting characters.
AlaskanFlash
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loooooooved it! Story, characters, the Tg all awsome!
naminami
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love the story, like you style hope you will continue with the story.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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