The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Too Much of a Good Thing
When Chloe suddenly finds herself with a wish to make, she never expects it to actually come true.  It doesn't take her long though to realize that the possibilities are enormous.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great work. This story gets right to business, which is always a plus. The focus is rightly on the eating and the growing, but I think you could let the characters play around with the situation. They're clearly enjoying themselves, but they're not really having _fun_, if that makes any sense. Little details like pinching and poking and little holes appearing in the panties and stuff would add depth to the descriptions.

Great work tho. Really enjoyed it.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A generally enjoyable story, keep it up!
My only suggestion would be to add a bit of depth to the latter half of the story (everything after she begins being fed). It doesn't quite match the depth of the first half. You could really draw out the expansion, and maybe end it more gradually...
In any case, loved it. Can't wait to see more!

Roid Abuser
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

This was well-written, but just not that enjoyable.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It's been a good long while, since I've seen a genuinely enjoyable story on here. Thanks for bringing one along~

Ninja In The Night
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I would say this story is quite decent. I enjoyed the growth, the dialogue, and the characters. However, I think it went quite quickly from meh to over the top. Not the growth, but just the rate of speed. I think you could really stretch this story out and work with it a bit more, especially considering that it ends at such an abrupt point.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I'm sure you meant...

"I can't control people's minds or raise the dead..."

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I'd rate the BE a 5 as well, except that it is somewhat low on detail during the actual growth. Technically good, I didn't notice any problems, so if there are any, they weren't very big. The characters - well, character, really - is good. Definitely hoping there's a Part 2 coming - you took the time to set up Chloe as a character who deserved the good wish, and the requirement for a partner who loves her both as she is and as she would become makes sure it's not a monkey's paw wish. Interestingly, if the Old Woman was saying what she seemed to say, it also makes it so that Chloe herself could have massive binges, of unbelievable quantities, with no change. I would find that a nice scene for the buffet - Chloe binges on self-feeding, people wonder where she's putting it all. Then her love starts feeding her, and she grows to match what she's been eating.

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