My first story. What's the worst that can happen to a faulty cursed love doll? Answer is a lot!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 3.33
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 2.67
tstar
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
not enough of a story.everything happened too fast.bad story line.
flies
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
I really liked the theme of this story, and the character of the doll. I thought it was very sexy overall. The only thing is that I had a lot of trouble parsing the text. It's hard to follow exactly what's happening to the main character. For instance, i have no idea what the final "click" refers to.
So that's why the low technical rating. other than that, good stuff.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I liked everything about this but the end.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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