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The Overflowing Bra

Lord Aimnor
aimnor@yahoo.com
The ninth coin(revised)
Taking some hints from the feedback I have altered the story a little and made it available in PDF format. Hope you enjoy
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R@gnaroCker
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Personally, I don't like these people who'd give you a worse rating just because you used a single format. PDF is common enough. My rating is based on your story.

When it comes to story's regarding sexual fantasies, I like them to be able to get me 'started'. This one didn't. It needed more interaction with other people. This is just one character after all. If she was in a park or beach, you've could've written more about her embarrasment. Or had an evil antagonist gloating over her predictament.

anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I really enjoyed the content of the story, though the grammar could use some flow improvements. I'll be looking forward to more!
By the way, your description of the BE itself was perfect.

AgentDee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I really liked it, it reminded me a lot of part of the "Big Business" story by Wren. in the BB story the main character is in a bathroom stall that is slowly getting filed up by her giant growing boobs too.

AdobeGuy
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

If your going to release one format, use a txt file, everyone can open that. If you must do a PDF, include something else in the archive, like a txt file. :)

no one
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Never make PDF the only format for a story, it's pretty unpleasant to use.

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