With some magical help from her voluptuous sister, Annie becomes a big girl, bigger in fact than she had ever imagined possible. (I'm still new at this, so feedback is definitely appreciated)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.60
- BE: 4.30
- Characters: 4.40
- Technical: 4.50
Toymaker
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
For your first story, it made for a rather good read. I liked the weight gain in the story, and the premise is a good one. I didn't realize that this was a 4-part story; I downloaded the last 2 parts and look forward to reading them.
Ringo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
5 because it is very nice to read pls more! and thank you!
bled
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I think I would have slowed things down a notch; as it is, she's running out of runway, and we haven't even had her fiancé on-screen yet to help her grow. Not sure where you can go from here, unfortunately, but I love the chubby aspect of it.
raith1411
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
dh
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Very nice stories, although I found the endings a bit anti-climactic.
cman
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
An enjoyable read. Considering the quality of many new authors' work, this is excellent.
Stenitch
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Good writing, the belly expansion wasn't wonderful, but the rest was spot on, overall very enjoyable to read though, good work!
MTS
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice start to what I see as a very good story. Like the Chubby Chaser elements to your stories.
Paul Gerard
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A nice little story, well done! Also, the style and grammar were good - thanks!
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