Mark is just your average high schooler, great friends, loving girlfriend, and an overall normal life. But when he receives his new ring in the mail, the world begins to change around him into one filled with buxom beauties and large bosoms everywhere he turns. How will he handle himself?
(This is part one of what is expected to be a trilogy.)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.75
- BE: 4.45
- Characters: 4.40
- Technical: 4.30
Chaos Master
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
11/21/2010 I like it! On another note, have you ever thought about doing some weird alterations? It could be interesting to have a world where such things as ie: catgirls, harpies (beautiful with big tits, of course) or even nypmhs were considered part of everday life and treated as routine. Again I LOVE this story. cannot wait for part 2!!
100% fun
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
if everone had ring like that the world whould truly be 100% hapy
tstar
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
great story,still needed more about the growth.there wasn't any sex.
screamingmidget
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
fantastic in all areas. can't wait for part two.
MB2009
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Absoutely loved all of it! Can't wait to see more please hurry with part 2! :-D
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I agree, it needs a sex scene (or several). Otherwise, great. Oh, and a person has a "waist", you "waste" time. :)
PsyBomb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Literally the only complaint I had was a lack of an explixit sex scene, as mentioned earlier. You have everything else, from beautiful transformation description to the main character actually acting like things are unusual and trying to figure out what's going on.
The nature of the story makes specific BE scenes implausible, as only the main character realizes what's going on. Otherwise, I'd want one (or several) of those, too.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great teaser, waiting for part 2
Vez'Roth
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Very, VERY good story. looking forward to the rest of it.
Murakami
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great story. All it needs is a ton of explicit sex, now that it's all set up. Come on, part 2!
bear chives
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I love these environment-changing stories!! Lots and lots of BE, which was great fun.
My only complaint would be the lack of explicit sex scenes, but the situation itself is so erotic that this was a minor shortcoming.
Not sure where you'll go from here - don't be afraid to start another story if continuing this one proves tiresome.
MrHHH
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I really liked this story. The only thing I think needs improvement is the BE descriptions. I'm looking forward to part 2
Waldowin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well done. We need more with the quality like this. (and surprisingly enough, no horrible typos involved!)
Paul Cullen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Amazing story! I cannot wait for the rest.
Grayface
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Wow! Just wow. This is one of the best stories I've read in a long time.
Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Mark's bewilderment, in particular, is well-captured in his thoughts. And the numerous excellent transformations don't hurt! Looking forward to the next part...
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Simply stunning. Please don't stop!
don sean
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great story, looking forward to more
Doc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
You've got something here; both in writing talent and story quality. I've seen many authors write an awesome story or two and then drop off the face of the internet, and I hope that you won't be one of them. My only complaint is that the story had to end!
I can't wait to see where you go with future incarnations, and how much farther you'll be willing to take the changes!
Guy Incognito
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
You have a lot of broken sentences in the beginning, but the more the story wore on, the less it happened...other than that, I LOVED IT!!
Throw two more stories at me like that, and you might be one of my new favorite writers.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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