A man uses a strange stone to make his fantasies come true and change the collective fate of an entire family.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.17
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 3.33
- Technical: 4.50
Above Ground Pools
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
However, the author created a cool thing..!
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Interesting story. I gave it a 4 in overall enjoyment, cause I thoiught you would have made Leslie's breasts grow. It only seemeed fair.
I also didn't "like" the ending. You could have killed off the Dad.
But the story was original, well written and fun.
boobmonkey
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This story was a pleasent surprise for me. Whilst I'm not that comfy with the younger characters (not familiar with the US school ages) the Voyeur side of the story was very appealing. I also like the writing touches, the odd lines that set the story as a story one would tell, rather than just a narrative (would I do it all again? yeah I would... etc.)
Hope you decide to write another.
Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
One for the mantle. I'm usualy not that into TG but this one built up to it in just the right way to the point that it ended up being one of my favorite parts. Only section that suffered was characters because what with the break-neck pace of the story we didn't really get to enjoy watching the characters becoming accustomed to their growth. Thanks a lot for a great story!
Russian Judge
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
This story looks like a promising start. The transgender aspect of it is terrific. So is the pseudo-incestual sex the main character has while "viewing" sex with the two young people. But I got the feeling that the writer wanted to do more. Like give his adult friends some sexual enhancements as well...and making the two teens he transformed more like full personalities rather than passive sex objects. Finally, although the narrator accomplishes all these changes, he is passive. He sounds like he'd like to be more than just a "distant viewer" of the erotic action, but he's far too wimpy to do that. This might change if the author decides to write a sequel.
Bob
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Excellent :-) I’d say there was definitely room for a Part Two :-)
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