The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

humblefool
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Willpower
A small college student take a lie as truth, and ends up growing just like she'd always wanted. Based on wizdomtooth.deviantart.com/art/Will-Power-132541813
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namrego
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Agree with the third comment, it's actually a good piece of writing, there are stories that are intended to be short

Duuude
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

Way too short. Needs to be much much longer. Develop the plot slowly.

tstar
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

too short,not enough put into it.short story fast growth equals blaaa.

George
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

AWESOME. You, my good sir, have produced the perfect story, following an amazing piece of art. The worst part of the story is that it ENDS. How can you fix it? Write moar.

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