pakled05@hotmail.com
This was original meant for another type of site, but it's been a while, and no answer, so a few tweaks, and presto-chango, it's here...
I've got about another week of 'freedom', and then I'm not going to be able to write for some time, and only infrequently. It's a shame, but sometimes real life intervenes.
Another Sci-fi story, shorter, but more BE (though mostly in the background). Have fun.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 3.33
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 4.33
melthecatt
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Add more biogel. Make her get bigger when she gets really aroused. Also do her hips and ass get bigger, and she get a little taller?
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Quite an enjoyable story; there was little BE, but the story itself was very engaging. Personally, I liked your ideas for the "technical explanations" of the BE and other... things.
PaulG
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Nice :) From a technical point, again, just a few minor, non-distracting glitches - though maybe your writing software's auto-correction is at fault ("you're" instead of "your", or that damn plural-s vs. possessive 's, or capitalized partial sentences after quotation marks. One sentence seems to have cracked apart during editing. Like I said, just some minor stuff.
Interesting story setting, it's like a horny crossover variation of A.I., I, Robot and The Bicentennial (Wo-)Man :)
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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