The Overflowing Bra

I really enjoyed this story a lot.  I agree with the rest that this needs corrections, but the ideas were great!

I have to assume English is not your native language?
As some others in here have suggested, why don't you try to reach out to a native English speaker to see if they can help you articulate your story?  I would hate for you to be discouraged by all of this negative feedback and hope you understand that we WANT to like your story.  In its current state, however, it is almost completely unreadable.
Maybe try connecting with someone through skype so you can talk through your ideas?
Good luck, Jake.  I hope you stick with it and take the time to polish this story so it can be represented to the community!

author should look this over,not understandable writing. maybe make a real effort in writing. consider that others are reading it.

Grab a clue and post your stories in a format anyone can read on any system without having to use a specific program. Text or HTML as an example (like 99% of the other stories here and those remaining 1% getting crap ratings like this). 

Ok, I can't open WPS (or whatever it was in). From the sound of it, run it through spell check and then upload it as a txt format and that alone will make everyone much happier.

Would like to read the story but can't because its in Works format.  Make it TXT or DOC format so that most of the world can read it.

I also have to agree with the above comments. Great story premise, I like where this was was going. It just needs severe editing to make it legible. But this was a good start, keep it up.

Ask and ye shall receive.
If you post stories with extremely poor grammar, bad spelling, and terrible formats, all you'll get is flak in the comment section. Not to mention awful ratings.
You probably shouldn't post any stories at all until you've fixed the above issues, as well as those mentioned in other comments. At all.

If you had taken 5 minutes and gone through any of the feedback from the last ten stories, you'd know that:
1. wps is unreadable by the majority of the audience here.
2. spell checking and editing are the largest source of feedback here.
3. if you want people to "be kind," take some pride in your work and take the time to make it shine.
All of that being said, if you go back and revisit your work (and have someone else do so as well), make it readable, and repost it, there are plenty of people here who will critique it properly. 

Okay, since you asked, I'll be kind.
This story is written very, very badly. It is unreadable. You need an editor. You also need a lot more practice writing. You also need to pass an English class.

What is WPS format? Post in TXT if you don't have a normal word processor. We can't open it.

Agree with the comments above.  Good idea, badly presented, the spelling and grammar are bad enough it's tough to follow the story at all.

I couldn't really finish the story due to complete lack of editing. Sorry, buddy.
I did skim it, though, to be able to rate it somewhat appropriately. Good ideas, but you really need to work on presenting them. Grammar is your friend, man!