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A man relates the story of a professional older woman who seduces him then announces she intends to be part of a clinical trial of some new procedure that promises "breast rejuvenation."
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.83
- BE: 4.75
- Characters: 4.83
- Technical: 4.83
wtftit
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent as always. Though "But You Should Have Seen The One That Got Away" is still my favorite (and yes I noticed the reference). Please keep writing these!
pakled
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Was gonna say something nice at BEA, but apparently I don't have the right to post anything in the forums. It's always something. I'm more interested in why this didn't show up in the 'last 10'. I hate missing the good stuff. Don't stop now...
big hock
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I am a fan of every story you have posted here. This story is certainly no exception. Your characters, as always, bear some real weight.
John
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
The return of Kowalski does not dissapoint.
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This text is better than your previous compositions. Thank you for telling a healthy story for a change. My only criticism is that you compress too much into the epilogue. Your eloquence flows out like a steadfast river until that last chapter, and then you move with exigent speed to the end.
Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Astounding work. I haven't read something so objectively well written on the OB in a long time. Thank you very much for sharing that with us all.
Kowalski
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Thanks.
I love getting encouragement and I enjoy hearing what you liked.
OmniTrixie
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The most literate effort I've seen in some time.
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
An excellent story. Heat. Growth. Humor...and even a pinch of reality. A true joy to read. Please continue to share your craft with us.
Hutch
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well written. I love how you take your time with the entire story and don't rush anything!
bear chives
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
very, very well written. your prose is clear and natural, your characters rounded, the dialogue is good.
dug the story, big time.
Baconman
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Write novels.
Do it. Right fucking now.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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